Audience Feedback - 28/03/14

On Friday 28th March, I showed the class a rough draft of my film opening to get their feedback on it. I don't plan to film any more unless it is absolutely necessary, instead I will just re-edit with the existing footage to try and address the issues they raised.



Good points:

• Monologue gave more of a backstory.
• Flashbacks helped illustrate the backstory a little.
• Font is better.
• Creative placement of titles are much more interesting.
• First flashback is quite funny.
• Drinking at the pub flashback is believable and relate-able for the audience.

Bad points:

• Monologue is slow at the beginning - maybe use cutaways to break it up a little?
• The POV shots aren't clear - use the footage that involves them interacting with me.
• Flashback shots may go on for a little too long - experiment with shot lengths (more clips, but shorter?).
• Some of the opening titles disappear into the video footage - address placement of titles.
• Black screen at the beginning is slightly too short - add a little empty sound beforehand.
• Monologue was a little 'sudden' - bridge the sound to ease the audience into it (maybe start the monologue with the cutaways, then re-introduce the character after a little while).
• Increase the volume of the pub scene a little.

Progress - 14/3/14

Last night Jake Wheeldon, Jake Kavanagh, Jay Dobinson and I all met up to film the pub scene. After a little discussion, we decided to get a lot of 'natural looking' footage, and so we simply all bought a drink and chatted about general things as we would usually do. I then filmed this with a POV shot and a few static shots - this way, we managed to get a lot of good footage to be inserted when Mark is monologuing. I will film the monologue as soon as my house is free (most likely next Monday) and then I'll be able to finish the rough cut of the full film opening.

I will then get the cover version of 'Walk' by Foo Fighters (that I have used to show the class my previous version) and export it as an audio file. This will allow me to put it onto my iPod and then play along with it (for the correct length of time) in the music room in school. Next week, I can then record all of the musical instruments necessary to create the music track and finally finish the opening fully.

I know that the opening will be way over two minutes, so after completing and uploading the version that I want to make, I will cut it down until it is at an appropriate length. The music may need to be edited a bit (or even re-recorded) but this shouldn't take too long to redo.

So the project will hopefully be 100% finished by the end of next week.

Planning - Shot List

10/03/14

Below is the final Shot List that we ended up working from. Below that however, are the previous versions from when I was 'fleshing out' my ideas (these are dated for convenience).

Shot No.	Scene No.	Int./Ext.	Location	Shot Description	Any other info?
1	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Medium shot of Mark, getting part of the homeowner in shot.	All dialogue is said in this single shot.
2	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Extreme close up of Mark’s face and the door being slammed in it.	The music starts after a few seconds of silence.
3	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Wide shot of Mark turning away and walking towards the camera.
4	2 (montage of shots - these will be repeated for various locations)	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Low angle, full body shot of Mark as he knocks on the door.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses - depending on what is available.
5	2 (montage of shots - these will be repeated for various locations)	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Over the shoulder shot from Mark’s perspective as he talks to a potential customer.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses - depending on what is available.
6	2 (montage of shots - these will be repeated for various locations)	Ext.	Front door of another house.	High angle, capturing the corner of the door and Mark in the frame.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses - depending on what is available.
7	2 (montage of shots - these will be repeated for various locations)	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Low angle from inside the house, capturing Mark and the homeowner’s leg in the frame.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses - depending on what is available.
8	3	Int.	In a living room.	Noddy shot of Mark as he begins his monologue.
9	4	Int.	In a bedroom.	Medium close up of Carol.	Press in on Carol’s face, just after she says “repetitive and boring”, tilt up to see Mark.
10	5	Int.	In a living room.	Noddy shot of Mark as he continues monologue.
11	6	Int.	In a pub/bar.	POV from Mark’s view.	Maybe drinking alcohol?
12	7	Int.	In a living room.	Noddy shot of Mark as he finishes monologue.

30/12/13

Due to the change in location and script, I have also changed the shot list to help the cameraman as much as possible when filming.

Shot No.	Scene No.	Int./Ext.	Location	Shot Description	Any other info?
1	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Medium shot of Mark, getting part of the homeowner in shot.	All dialogue is said in this single shot.
2	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Extreme close up of Mark’s face and the door being slammed in it.	The voiceover starts as Mark stands in shock for a few seconds, then turns away.
3	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Wide shot of Mark turning away and walking towards the camera.
4	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Low angle, full body shot of Mark as he knocks on the door.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
5	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Over the shoulder shot from Mark’s perspective as he talks to a potential customer.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
6	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	High angle, capturing the corner of the door and Mark in the frame.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
7	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Low angle from inside the house, capturing Mark and the homeowner’s leg in the frame.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
8	3	Int.	In a bedroom.	Close Up of Carol and pushes in on her throughout the whole shot.	Mark sits up behind her and the camera tilts to keep him in shot.
9	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A tracking shot coming out from around a corner, revealing the boys chatting.	This should slowly reveal Mark and his friends all chatting about many typical ‘boy’ things.
10	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A close up of the drink that Mark is drinking; the camera tilts up as Mark takes a sip.
11	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	Over the shoulder shot from Mark’s perspective.	Maybe run the scene from each perspective and use a few over the   shoulder shots from each character.
12	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A worms eye view shot of Mark as he takes his last sip from the glass – the screen goes slightly out of focus as he swallows.
13	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A wide shot capturing the whole room and all the boys – for the final few lines of dialogue.
14	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A low angle shot of the boys leaving the garage – a drink is in focus in the foreground and they leave in the background.

21/10/13

Shot No.	Scene No.	Int./Ext.	Location	Shot Description	Any other info?
1	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Medium shot of Mark, getting part of the homeowner in shot.	All dialogue is said in this single shot.
2	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Extreme close up of Mark’s face and the door being slammed in it.	The voiceover starts as Mark stands in shock for a few seconds, then turns away.
3	1	Ext.	Front door of a house.	Wide shot of Mark turning away and walking towards the camera.
4	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Low angle, full body shot of Mark as he knocks on the door.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
5	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Over the shoulder shot from Mark’s perspective as he talks to a potential customer.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
6	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	High angle, capturing the corner of the door and Mark in the frame.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
7	2	Ext.	Front door of another house.	Low angle from inside the house, capturing Mark and the homeowner’s leg in the frame.	This is part of the montage, so variants of the shot may be used on different houses.
8	3	Int.	In a pub/bar.	Low angle shot with a pint glass in focus, while Mark and Carol are in the background having a conversation.
9	3	Int.	In a pub/bar.	Over the shoulder shot of conversation between Mark and Carol (from over Marks’ shoulder).	Shot-revers shot with shot 10.
10	3	Int.	In a pub/bar.	Over the shoulder shot of conversation between Mark and Carol (from over Carol’s shoulder).	Shot-reverse shot with shot 9.
11	3	Int.	In a pub/bar.	Close up of the side of Mark’s face as Carol slaps him.
12	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A tracking shot coming out from around a corner, revealing the boys chatting.	This should slowly reveal Mark and his friends all chatting about many typical ‘boy’ things.
13	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A close up of the drink that Mark is drinking; the camera tilts up as Mark takes a sip.
14	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	Over the shoulder shot from Mark’s perspective.	Maybe run the scene from each perspective and use a few over the   shoulder shots from each character.
15	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A worms eye view shot of Mark as he takes his last sip from the glass – the screen goes slightly out of focus as he swallows.
16	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A wide shot capturing the whole room and all the boys – for the final few lines of dialogue.
17	4	Int.	In a converted garage.	A low angle shot of the boys leaving the garage – a drink is in focus in the foreground and they leave in the background.